
Poetry requires a deftness with space and language, a skill akin to lacing. Lacing needs sure fingertips, careful measurements, knowledge of the spaces as well as the threads, their knots, their weaves, none of which I’ve fully understood.
Oh, I’m not putting down prose–a great book requires all these things, too. But there’s something about the poetic line, that tight little collection of words that must balance just-so with the empty space surrounding it, that is needed more in poetry than prose. Studying such rich handfuls of language can only better the prose writer, inside and out.
I can still remember the first poem that shook me. Not a hymn, not Scripture–pshaw, I grew up around that stuff. For the first couple decades of life, that stuff sat next to the peanut butter, mixed into the pile of bills on the kitchen table, hung on the hook in the hall. Just another part of the day.
College: changes.
For the first time, I was in a place where no one else knew my family. I wasn’t being judged by the actions of my parents or brothers. I was me. I finally embraced my passion to write and yes, I dared choose story-telling over music. I worked to understand that which mattered inside me.
That which hurt.
For the first time, I spoke to an adult, the college chaplain, about The Monster. His hands. My despair.
Later that same day I was trapped in a poetry unit of a lit class. I didn’t get any of it: meaning, syntax, meter. Hell, I was barely listening. Blah, blah, sentence fragments words, blah, blah. I just wanted to leave, and deal.
Next in our anthology was Langston Hughes’ “Mother to Son.”
Well, son, I’ll tell you:
Life for me ain’t been no crystal stair.
It’s had tacks in it,
And splinters,
And boards torn up,
And places with no carpet on the floor—
Bare.
But all the time
I’se been a-climbin’ on,
And reachin’ landin’s,
And turnin’ corners,
And sometimes goin’ in the dark
Where there ain’t been no light.
So, boy, don’t you turn back.
Don’t you set down on the steps.
‘Cause you finds it’s kinder hard.
Don’t you fall now—
For I’se still goin’, honey,
I’se still climbin’,
And life for me ain’t been no crystal stair.
Every line. Word. Space. Stuck.
Never had words burrowed into me, gripped the pit of me and twisted, fucking hurt as they twisted and pulled–because they were trying to right me. I took that poem to the dorm, and bawled for a long, long time. I still cry every time I read it.
Of course all writers want to grip readers. But there are those, like Hughes, who do far more than entertain, or inspire. They transform us. That transformation may be one of the bloodiest experiences in our souls, but we are, yes we are, the stronger for it.
~*~
College: changes.
I studied literature for a summer at University College Cork. I didn’t really fit in with those who spent every lecture drinking alcohol in soda containers and flying to London on weekends to go clubbing. Nor did I fit with the academics who’ve read Ulysses and/or Finnegan’s Wake twice and sat on the dormitory’s stoop to pontificate nature, economy, philosophy. I spent much of the off-hours alone, wandering Cork, reading Seamus Heaney, doing my damndest not to be a dunce.
I can’t tell you which poem fell upon me me first. “Blackberry-Picking,” I think.
Late August, given heavy rain and sunFor a full week, the blackberries would ripen.At first, just one, a glossy purple clotAmong others, red, green, hard as a knot.You ate that first one and its flesh was sweetLike thickened wine: summer’s blood was in itLeaving stains upon the tongue and lust forPicking. Then red ones inked up and that hungerSent us out with milk cans, pea tins, jam-pots
Pardon me for being evil, and breaking his stanza. I want to pause it here, because I can feel the call-back of the memory in these lines.
The title seemed simple to me. I should be able to understand a basic description, right? And being the Midwest girl that I am, raised in a farming town before getting shuffled to Milwaukee because God said so, I felt like I could even–gasp–write almost-intelligently about it. Harvest. Rural life. Childhood innocence. Yay, I understood something!
Then something else happened, something that for all my writing aspirations, I had never really considered:
Language.
The first two lines form a smooth sentence, a prosey sentence. But line 3 comes along and says: “glossy purple clot.” Suddenly I am holding something, vivid and bright. Yet “clot.” Why “clot”? Who associates “clot” with delicious fruit? We want blood to clot, I suppose. And there you have it, lines 5 and 6, describing sweet “flesh” and “summer’s blood.” Line 7 builds to “lust” and–hey! The sentence is broken! The space urges me to line 8 where capitalized, separated by the rest of the line with a period, comes the act, the want, the purpose: “Picking.”
Every word Heaney shares connects with one or more senses:
Where briars scratched and wet grass bleached our boots.Round hayfields, cornfields and potato-drillsWe trekked and picked until the cans were full,Until the tinkling bottom had been coveredWith green ones, and on top big dark blobs burnedLike a plate of eyes. Our hands were pepperedWith thorn pricks, our palms sticky as Bluebeard’s.
We hoarded the fresh berries in the byre.But when the bath was filled we found a fur,A rat-grey fungus, glutting on our cache.The juice was stinking too. Once off the bushThe fruit fermented, the sweet flesh would turn sour.I always felt like crying. It wasn’t fairThat all the lovely canfuls smelt of rot.Each year I hoped they’d keep, knew they would not.
Gah! Not just “grey,” or “silver,” or “fuzzy,” but “rat-grey.” Immediately, we think of pestilence, unwanted, toxic growth. More of such vivid sounds that we can taste against the roofs of our mouths and yet see, all at once: “fresh berries/byre” or “fungus, glutting.” Action moves quickly with the imagery: “fruit fermented”…”sweet flesh would turn sour.” Three words transform what is loved to what is lost.
And the ending of the poem…we have this sort of short “o” sound three times in the last four lines: “sour,” “rot,” not.” “Sour” creates tension on two fronts: that growling “r” carries on in “fair,” the positive, the hopeful, only “It wasn’t fair,” was it? And the short “o” of “sour” echoes in the harsh monosyllabic phrase, “smelt of rot.” Damn, such a slamming there. A child, stomping his boots at the unfairness, the inevitability despite the hope the narrator knows is in vain, yet holds in his jars and cans every year: “knew they would not.” The whole last line is monosyllabic, too, words falling like so many spoiled berries one tips from the can onto the ground.
I carried Heaney and all these thoughts back with me to the dorm. No, no tears today, but another epiphany, yes. For the first time, I wasn’t looking at words for what they achieve as a whole. Of course, “Blackberry-Picking” is a story in its own right, complete with characters, conflict, climax. But so much is accomplished in the little things here, too.
Every word written carries a rhythm. Listen with every sense. Capture what you can.
Repeat.

A lot of words but good ones. I’m glad I’m allowed to twist words and cheat as a lyricist!
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Lucky duck! 🙂 xxxxx
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Poetry is the most wonderful medium. A window on other worlds. Very good celebration of what it means to you x
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(bows with clunky grace) Thank you kindly, Friend. 🙂 xxxx
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Don’t you dare bow with anything less than a swan’s grace, lady xxxxxxxx
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Yes, Madame. 😉 xxx
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The genius of Heaney is easy to reflect upon, so very hard to pin down. A rather fabulous read, Ms Lee.
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Oh heavens, yes. I was trying to work through three other poems before I finally felt “safe,” using “Blackberry-Picking.” Thank you for everything as always, Master Steeden. 🙂 xxxx
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I love Seamus Heaney, especially Twice Shy, Midterm Break, and Digging. So gorgeous, lyrical, and gut-wrenching.
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Oh he is. And his prose poetry stuns me as a style. It’s so deceptive, this singular paragraph, and then you start to read…
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“Blackberry-Picking”… I keep thinking about how Charlotte would summarize this one. 🙂
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Oh man….it, erm, probably wouldn’t be very nice… 🙂
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Such a wonderfully rich voice. Class.
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The world’s blessed to have such voices captured. 🙂
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Great choices. Writing poetry is extremely difficult for me. Done well, its a most exquisite writing style. Extracting the bone marrow of feelings through the use of cleverly distilled words!
These are gutsy poets that you have chosen. I have always loved Langston Hughes work- work that’s very under the radar here in the UK. Heaney’s ‘Blackberry-Picking’ is sensuous and hypnotic to listen to and a delight to read, re-read. Visceral and literary, all at once. 🙂 x
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Oh gosh, yes! Bone marrow…excellent way to put it.
I don’t think I’ve ever connected to another poet as I have with these two. Of any poet thrown at me for educational purposes, these are the poets I’ll actually read for “fun.”
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‘Blackberry Picking’ is such a wonderful poem and Heaney’s voice is perfect.
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I agree. I was so excited to find a video of him reading!
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Great post, Jean! What draws people to certain poets/poems always fascinates me. These are a couple of my favorites. Heaney’s voice and Voice. What a treat.
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Oh yes, I love hearing these poems spoke–with feeling! And I have to emphasize the feeling because in graduate school, where the occasional poet would visit, there seemed to be this unspoken protocol that poets had to read their poetry with the flattest, most monotone voice possible. Why? WHY??? It just makes the poetry emotionally absent and physically dull. Blech!
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What beautiful selections, Jean! I love the way you highlight the beauty and power of these pieces by connecting them to your history, and how you draw our attention to the writers’ skill.
I fell in love with poetry as a wee thing, and then I got older and started being required to analyze it- it felt like a trick. “Oh, you think it means this? Well HA! You’re wrong!” And there goes the joy… :p My college poetry prof helped rectify that. He also played Iron Maiden for us when we read Ryme of the Ancient Mariner, which just seemed bizarre because to an 18 year old he seemed WAY too old for loud music! (he was probably 50? Doesn’t seem so old now…)
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LOL! Thank goodness for profs who don’t quite grow up. My college profs just KILLED poetry for me. A certain monochrome-speaker who shall not be named…oh man. One more comment about “iambic pentameter” out of him and I’d leave the room a’ la Daffy Duck Style. 😉
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Which would be hilarious to watch, but yes, I can see how that would be maddening!!!
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You are so versatile, Jean. I just can’t do poetry and while I see the beauty of it, the doing of it confounds me which makes me think that I’m probably missing something somewhere.
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Thank you! Reading is one thing, but writing is something else altogether. I don’t think I could ever write poetry in any official capacity. I’m just thankful I can read it…well, at least some of it…by two people… 😉
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Maybe I should start with one person and see how that goes.🤪
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Good thinkin’. 🙂
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Nice reflections. I love poetry, too, though like you, found the module at University a struggle at first. Funny thing, though, after a couple of sessions I began to love unravelling poems. Isn’t it amazing that a few lines written by someone on another continent can speak movingly to a person on the other side of the world, decades later?
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Oh yes. There’s that transportation we can’t help but experience when the right words come to us at the right moment. x
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Wonderful post. Oh, goodness, yes—a million times yes! Fictionists (and playwrights and copywriters and nonfictionists and musicians) can benefit from poetry so much. I began (or feel I did) as a poet and morphed into a fiction writer and am still honing my ability. Poetry gives you such appreciation for the musicalities of language, the pitch and alliteration and cadence . . . aspects that some writers lose when they delve into the logistics of plot, character arc, action, etc. with short stories and definitely with longer works. Now, how to bring a world quite round (and definitely patch it) as a fiction writer!
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Thanks so much for reading! I completely agree that the musicality of the prose often falls to the back burner in the interests of plot. Lord knows it has for me. 🙂 Lovely to meet you!
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You have a poetic heart, so rich.
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Oh yes! Amen! I’ve been thinking so much lately how actually all i’ve heard about the “spiritual,” “mystical,” “miraculous” or “profound” in the world of experiencing… finds its way into me through the rhythming of words attended with all the senses… as if my capacity for all the other sensory-perceptory human activities are instigated, alerted, compelled (love, parenting, learning, play) by what is learned (at every level of being) through just such…
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I love this post. It just celebrates what poetry is to you and so many people. Must go and find my Brenda Shaughnessy book.
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Do. 🙂
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