Upstairs and Downstairs and MURDER!

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.
JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

This month I snagged from the New Release shelf:

The Murder at World’s End by Ross Montgomery

Could my prologue curse be broken at last! Here’s another book that shows an author understands the power of a prologue done right.

The prologue sets the time period of the story: 1910, the days of Halley’s Comet’s chaos among folks all over. The historical exposition is balanced well with what’s going on with one Stephen Pike, a former convict ready to turn over a new leaf–if only he could get a job so that turning could start. The prologue ends with May 18th: the day folks could take pictures of Halley’s Comet because it was only 12 hours from Earth, and the day Pike receives a mysterious letter offering him a job at the grand estate World’s End. The prologue is only two pages long, but it provides a solid foundation of the world’s collective craziness alongside Stephen Pike’s desperation.

I always worry that Chapter 1 will pull a bait-and-switch on readers after such solid prologues. We’ve seen that happen here often enough. Thankfully, Montgomery continues the momentum in Chapter 1, picking right up where the prologue leaves off with one major change: we’re experiencing the story through Stephen’s point of view. There are slight changes in cadence and word choice, slight changes in grammar, and these little changes add up to a clear, working-class voice modern readers can easily follow. The first chapter focuses strictly on Stephen’s interview with the head butler of Tithe Hall, who insists that “there’s been some sort of mistake” and that Pike is not going to be hired.

Now as readers, we know differently because there wouldn’t be a story if Pike weren’t hired. But that’s not the point. This scene tactfully previews the kinds of situations ex-con Stephen will likely face when dealing with the “honest” working class in the Downstairs of Tithe Hall, not to mention the nobility class of the Upstairs. The scene is propelled along by dialogue with touches of Stephen’s thoughts; the pacing isn’t bogged down once, not even when Stephen’s trying to figure out how he could possibly get back to London if the butler turns him out.

I had never heard of Montgomery before this book, and it could be due to his writing children’s books before entering the adult fiction market. He’s clearly got a passion and flair for the mystery genre, and I’m excited to see how history and fiction come together in the chapters ahead.

Let’s see what next month’s find will teach us, shall we?

Coming up, I’ve got more interviews, trend-bucking, music, and words from Blondie. And let’s not forget–it’s almost summer! You know what that means…

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!