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You’ve Got Five Pages, #TheOlympianAffair by #JimButcher, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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When I saw the inside of the book cover was filled with unique world-related ads and propaganda, I knew I was in for something fun.

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

The Olympian Affair of The Cinder Series by Jim Butcher

I find myself in a sequel with Jim Butcher’s The Olympian Affair.

Book 2 of The Cinder Series takes a smart approach: start with one character walking through a town with a destination in mind. When a writer takes this narrow focus, they not only give themselves a chance to reacquaint readers with a specific character, but to also re-establish the setting of the world, too. Granted, it’s one town in a fantasy world, but it’s enough to get a sense of what the world is like and how it operates.

Airships are the name of the game here, which is always a fun steampunk concept, and I love that spires take on a whole new meaning through this world. (The fencing swords on the cover are what drew me to pick this book up in the first place.) The writing itself has an interesting rhythm; Butcher deploys short, strong sentences in the midst of long, active prose in order for those brief descriptors to pack a real punch–“The new vatteries stank.”–is a personal favorite of mine. Sensory details like this mixed with banter between two airship captains made the opening pages an intriguing read. If you’re ready to take off for a break from this world (I know I am) then I have a feeling Jim Butcher’s Cinder Spires series would make for an excellent escape.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

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You’ve Got Five Pages, Northwoods by #AmyPease, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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The North Woods is so much more ominous at night…

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

Northwoods by Amy Pease

What a delightful find! Amy Pease’s debut Northwoods is yet another mystery set in Northern Wisconsin, but I promise you, this prose and establishing chapter promise some fun thrills in the future.

Her first chapter is only two pages long, yet in those two little pages we see our protagonist Eli down on his luck and himself, floating alone out on a lake in the middle of the night, sipping whiskey and reflecting on life. We’re not told he’s sad or depressed—we can see it. Plus, the vivid sensory details of the night woods around him add to the isolation of the setting while also helping us feel Eli’s loneliness…that is, until something strange floats into his vicinity. At the end of that chapter he swims quickly ashore, unsettled, and reaches for his scanner. A couple pages into the second chapter, we learn he’s not only in law enforcement, but a military veteran. So, if something in the water scared HIM, then we as readers can only imagine it wasn’t good.

Sure, I’m naturally a little biased for Wisconsin-set stories, but Pease does a marvelous job of balancing world-building information with active narrative. This keeps the story’s pace in motion while readers continue to learn about life in this little vacation spot in Wisconsin. For those seeking a little mystery outside the gritty city life, Amy Pease is sure to transport you into the dark, unknown wild of the North Woods.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #HerLastBreath by #DanPadavona, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

Her Last Breath by Dan Padavona

I just noticed that on Amazon, the book is called “a gripping suspense thriller,” but my printed copy says “a chilling psychological thriller.” I suppose that’s one of the benefits of being an indie writer–you can tweak lots of things as you go!

The first chapter of Her Last Breath is a mixed bag. On the one hand, the build up of the prostitute Erika being propositioned and then murdered by an unknown man in an SUV is paced fairly well with strong sensory details. We can see and feel the tension of the moment between the man calling to Erika and promising a big payout and Erika choosing to ride home with this man. Plus there is a logistical reason for Erika to accept a ride from this wealthy stranger–she’s miles away from the city and needs a ride back. That isolation, even with a decaying resort motel in the background, helps readers feel the character’s helplessness. How else can she get home?

There are some struggles here as well, though, and these are struggles many of us writers face. We know we’ve got to establish the setting of our story, and establish it fast. However, we’ve got to think about what details the readers need here and now vs. what can wait. While the first paragraph introduces us to the prostitute cleaning up after a job at a motel, the second paragraph takes us through the history of that motel…and then we get back to the prostitute cleaning up again. It’s an odd moment to hear a lot of information about the place, especially when she’s going to leave it. Rundown motels outside of cities is not uncommon, so it would not have hurt to keep this initial context a bit more general so the plot’s momentum can pick up speed instead. After all, a detective investigating a murder has all sorts of opportunities to learn the histories of locations–why not wait until then? These are the kinds of world-building choices we writers have to watch for. As tempting as it is to dive into the setting’s history right away, do readers need it right away? Probably not. It never hurts to break that information up, and drop little bits when the needs arise for characters to learn it.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #TheNarrowRoadBetweenDesires by #PatrickRothfuss, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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We may not be kingkillers right now, but perhaps we’ll find ourselves there in time.

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

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The Narrow Road Between Desires by Patrick Rothfuss

I have been recommended Patrick Rothfuss’ The Name of the Wind quite often over the years, but here I am, diving into this shorter fantasy work of his instead. Even Rothfuss recommends NOT reading this short work before his other books, but I have done so…and am glad to have done so, too.

The first chapter quickly establishes our protagonist Bast, a known character from the other books. Being a complete newbie, I accepted that there could be unclear aspects of the world for me because I wasn’t familiar with the world of The Kingkiller Chronicle. Yet the first chapter starts in a very intimate, quiet way: Bast is trying to sneak out of the inn before his master notices. The innkeeper catches him, though, and sets him up with a mysterious book and a small list of errands before asking about a stranger who stopped by the inn earlier. Bast pretends to not know much of the stranger and takes off for his errands.

Doesn’t sound like much, does it? And the stranger’s name sounds like it is also something from the other books.

But that does not leave me flustered in the least. Rothfuss has a beautiful sense of the ear in his language, describing the different sounds created when a novice tries to sneak away vs. an expert vs. the artist Bast is. The visual and aural details mixed with metaphor creates a flow of prose one can easily coast upon, happy to see where the current takes them. Sure, I may choose to follow Rothfuss’ advice and NOT read The Narrow Road Between Desires before I read The Name of the Wind, but something tells me that if I stay with the current, Bast’s tale will still take me to some pretty exciting, unique places in that fantastical realm.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #BlindSpots by #ThomasMullen, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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Cops with vampire bat skills. Sure, why not?

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Well then, let’s study those first few pages in other people’s stories, shall we?

Today Blondie snagged from the New Release shelf:

Blind Spots by Thomas Mullen

This podcast covers a lot of mysteries–I mean, a LOT of mysteries–so it’s fun to see how blending mystery with another genre can create something unique yet accessible for a reader.

Thomas Mullen’s Blind Spots opens with a traditional setup of The Cop Stakeout, but this traditional setup is warped outside our traditional experience as protagonist Owens thinks about how much life has changed because of The Blinding: a mysterious event that has led to humanity collectively losing their eyesight. (During my podcast I read one moment that the sun was blown out of the sky–my apologies for the misread.) Now humanity has to see through “vidders,” implants that have turned humanity into “vampire bats,” as Owens describes it. It’s a fascinating concept that allows for the science fiction aspect of this story to shine; plus, it creates a multi-layer mystery here, for alongside the mystery Owens has to solve, we readers wonder about the mystery of The Blinding. For those who are eager for a new flavor of mystery, Blind Spots may be the perfect selection to sample.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #TheLostLibrary by #RebeccaStead and #WendyMass, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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When Blondie recommends something, I listen, by golly!

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Well then, let’s study those first few pages in other people’s stories, shall we?

Today Blondie snagged from the New Release shelf:

The Lost Library by Rebecca Stead and Wendy Mass

I can see why Blondie enjoyed this Middle-Grade tale.

We have a by-the-rules cat determined to keep mice out of the old house’s basement but refuses to eat them. Mortimer the cat is also a bit envious, for cats do not have many words while mice do. The multiple references to this in the first chapter leave us readers wondering if those abilities with words have something to do with this Middle-Grade mystery. Overall, this first chapter does a fine job establishing the story: we have a sense of our protagonist, we have a sense of how he interacts with others, and we also have a little bit of mystery established with Mortimer describing a guilty feeling about a library book cart in the house’s basement. Why is there a book cart down there? How could old library books make a cat feel so guilty, guilty enough to shoo mice along instead of eating them? I’m intrigued! And hey, if you’ve got a young reader in your household, The Lost Library could be a fun little mystery to share with them for a little extra after-school read.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #DeathintheDarkWoods by #AnneliseRyan, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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Alas, the Prologue Curse returns.

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Well then, let’s study those first few pages in other people’s stories, shall we?

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

Death in the Dark Woods by Annelise Ryan

Don’t get me wrong, my fellow creatives—Annelise Ryan’s premise for Death in the Dark Woods carries promise of something weird and wild, and in Wisconsin of all places! As a fellow Wisconsinite, I’m all in for that kind of mystery.

While the prologue starts a bit slow with a hunter failing to shoot a buck, the tension and pacing quickly mount to a chaotic, lethal attack. Ryan provides just enough detail for readers to experience the terror without getting gory; plus, readers are left in the dark as to what kind of animal killed the hunter. Considering Bigfoot is mentioned in the dust jacket, we as readers can certainly make a guess or two, ahem.

Then the official Chapter 1 brings all that tension to a halt as we restart the story with protagonist Morgan taking care of customers and chatting up the Chief of Police. Once again, we get a fine hook of a prologue only to be reeled in for a slow first chapter. Now the Chief is asking if Morgan will speak to someone in the DNR, so I’m hoping this means Chapter 2 takes readers to the woods where the hunter died. I just wish the narrative didn’t require slamming the brakes on the pacing in order to do that. Still, I’m happy to support local authors, especially ones with a quirky premise like this. A cryptozoologist hunting down monsters in Wisconsin? Let’s go!

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #TheWager by #DavidGrann, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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I think for the first time ever, I find the author’s note to be a compelling hook.

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Well then, let’s study those first few pages in other people’s stories, shall we?

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

The Wager: A Tale of Shipwreck, Mutiny, and Murder

David Grann’s The Wager: A Tale of Shipwreck, Mutiny, and Murder is a fascinating mix of true crime and nautical history.

Grann shares a quick paragraph before the prologue describing the “debris” he sorted through of conflicting accounts and half-truths and that he won’t reach a conclusion for us—we must make our own conclusions as to what really happened a couple centuries ago. It’s a cold case without any clear-cut closure…and I’m all for it.

The prologue then gives readers some basic context for what happened regarding the British ship The Wager: originally sent to overtake a Spanish galleon, it goes MIA only to appear battered and beaten off the coast of Brazil with a starved fraction of its original crew. Yet another smaller vessel with a few more survivors lands later, and these two parties provide very, VERY different accounts of what went down on The Wager and the island where all were shipwrecked. Now considering the unique terminology that comes with nautical period writing, I don’t think Grann’s book is for everyone, but if you’re prepared to lose yourself amongst the waves of the past, then I’m sure you’ll enjoy Grann’s The Wager.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friend!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #DistantSons by #TimJohnston, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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For the first time in a while we have us a prologue, folks. But what a prologue.

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Well then, let’s study those first few pages in other people’s stories, shall we?

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

Distant Sons by Tim Johnston

We are transported to a 1976 summer evening tense with sport and hormones and mystery as two brothers run off to play a baseball game…but only one returns.

It’s a damn beautiful prologue, the cadence of the prose flowing like a river such boys would splash in to cool off after a hard nine innings in the schoolyard. The narrator focuses on the experience of the elder brother, stuck with his younger brother for the game, so caught up in the game he forgets about the brother altogether. As he walks home through the woods he remembers the boy who had gone missing a year ago—and as the prologue ends, it sounds like the younger brother has met the same fate.

Now one of my biggest beefs about prologues of this caliber is that they’re often some sort of cover for a lousy first chapter, one that brings the momentum to a grinding halt and dumps us with information before attempting to restart the narrative action. For Johnston, this is not the case. Granted, we have been shifted to a new time—2018—and ride with a new character named Sean. However, we are not given a ton of exposition—hardly any at all, really. We are watching Sean deal with his busted truck and his prediction of how his future interaction with his father may go when he gets home. I stopped at this point due to time, so how this broken truck impacts Sean, I cannot say.

What I will say is that the prologue is a brilliant study of powerful prose that balances a lush setting with the relatable pangs of a boy aspiring to be more and with the looming fear of nefarious danger in the background. Even if you don’t want to read the rest of the novel, I recommend fellow writers check out Distant Sons for the prologue alone.

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!

You’ve Got Five Pages, #ThornHedge by #TKingfisher, to Tell Me You’re Good. #FirstChapter #BookReview #Podcast

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Storytelling is the truly powerful magic.

As writers, we hear all the time that we’ve got to hook readers in just the first few pages or else. We’ve got to hook agents in the first few pages or else.

Whether you’re looking to get published or just hoping to hook your reader, first impressions are vital. Compelling opening scenes are the key to catching an agent or editor’s attention, and are crucial for keeping your reader engaged.

JEFF GERKE, THE FIRST FIFTY PAGES

Well then, let’s study those first few pages in other people’s stories, shall we?

Today I snagged from the New Release shelf:

Thorn Hedge by T. Kingfisher

I admit, I am a little bias with today’s selection. When I saw T. Kingfisher had a new dark take on a classic story, I had to jump on it.

Thorn Hedge does not disappoint. Its opening pages are told from the Fairy’s perspective, describing a crushingly long passage of time as she guards a mysterious tower and the thorn hedge surrounding it. Granted, we as writers are always told to “show, don’t tell.” Kingfisher does the opposite in order to reflect on how much time passes under the Fairy’s watchful eye. Initially the wall of thorns is massive and obvious, drawing the attention of princes and ambitious boys from all over, but as generations come and go, the everyday nature creeps up and grows over this wall. Yet the Fairy fears that the story—yes, the story—of the tower and its secret has not died in time. I do love how Kingfisher focuses on the power of words, of story, and how THAT is to be feared rather than any kind of magic or weapon of the world.

Clues are given to readers to help gauge time, such as the Plague masks of the Black Death and the red crosses worn by knights during the Crusades. I admit, I started getting impatient when we reached the Crusades, for it was starting to feel like we would only see this story as a walk through time, but behold! On the sixth page comes a knight. And then, my fellow creatures, the true narrative starts.

So, if you are one for brief, vivid tellings of classic tales, I don’t think you’ll go wrong with Kingfisher here. I LOVED her take on The Fall of the House of Usher, so I’m stoked to see what she does with this Grimm, dark tale. 😊

No matter what the season brings, keep reading!

Read on, share on, and write on, my friends!